Stilblüten und eine Eins

Korrekturen über Korrekturen. Zehnter Jahrgang, Aufgabe war es, eine Inhaltsangabe zu einer Episode der Twilight Zone zu schreiben, zwei Punkte in der Erzählstruktur zu erkennen und eine Aussage zu bewerten. Da kamen interessante Sachen bei herum:

"Tina work the father to kill."

"The whole family is sitting on the dinner table."

"After the family is done eating her..."

"He finds the doll in her daughter."

"On after dinner agreed the father she get rid of."

"He try with all object to kill, because not success."

und mein Schmunzel-Favorit:

"The mother will the separation, because she denking he sick is."

Aber es gab auch eine beinahe brillante Arbeit:

"In the episode "Living Doll" from the series "The Twilight Zone", released in 1964 and published by Rod Serling, we follow the story of a man called Erich Streator, whose stepdaughter's new doll acts really strange. 

The story begins with Annabelle Streator and her daughter Christie returning home and Christie showing her stepdad Erich the new Doll she got. The Doll can speak and more, but Erich isn't really amused by that. This doesn't changes for the better when the Doll tells Erich that she hates him, when no one else heard it. Since then, every time they are alone together in the room, she acts strange and tells him how much she hates him and wants to kill him.

Erich confronts Annabelle, thinking she is the one controlling the Doll and saying these hate statements, which she denies. Shortly after, he throws the doll away, but then he gets a phonecall from the doll. He discovers that the Doll isn't in the trashcan anymore. When he found the Doll in Christies bed, he decides to destroy her, but somehow he couldn't harm her with his tools. Later, he gives the Doll back to Christie, but in the following nights he hears the sounds of the Doll. While searching for her, he stumbles over the Doll. He falls down the stairs and dies. When Annabelle found him, the Doll starts to talk to her too, saying she shouldn't harm her.

The storys conflict is that the Doll only talks to Erich when he is alone, making him believe his partner is the one who plays her game with him. This makes Annabelle and the viewers question his sanity, because he gets very paranoid and starts to hate the Doll in an obsessed way, which seems insane for those who don't really know that the Doll is actually acting strange. In my opinion, this is the biggest conflict in the story, because if Annabelle would trust him or even know that the Doll is up for no good, they wouldn't argue all the time. Then the relationship between the characters wouldn't fall apart.

The conflict gets solved when the Doll then speaks to Annabelle. This clears the actions of her husband and made her understand. This is also the turning point, revealing that the doll is actually alive and doesn't only goes for Erich, but for Annabelle too. (...)"

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Ich bewundere die Lexik und Satzkonstrukte des jungen Mannes, der diese Inhaltsangabe und Analyse geschrieben hat. Da sind ein paar Unschärfen, aber wir sprechen hier von einer zehnten Klasse, die mit einer Oberstufenklausur konfrontiert wurde. Ich bin begeistert!